once upon a night


Flickering shadows on the wall
A dim light from the street lamp
Tapping sound as the raindrops fall
Upon the soil, now oh so damp!

Visions flash through my mind
Of places from forgotten past
And the dreams that were left behind
And the moments that just went too fast!

Of knights and palaces, and swords and horses
Of ghosts and witches and magical forces
Of seas and stars and skies and sands
Of peaceful nights in faraway lands

My heart goes back to them again
In a state of complete tranquility
Not bound by reality and its pains
Not held back by threats of inability

My eyelids slowly cover my eyes
I’m floating in a free open space
And as my sense of reality dies
I leave this world without a trace….

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34 Comments

  1. 700miles said,

    September 13, 2010 at 1:17 pm

    the third stanza just rolls off the tongue. very nice!

    • Alethea said,

      September 13, 2010 at 4:59 pm

      thanks 700….that is my favorite part of the poem ;). So glad you liked it πŸ™‚

  2. brian said,

    September 13, 2010 at 5:17 pm

    nice…the blending of reality and dream is sometimes hard to differentiate….

  3. Jingle said,

    September 13, 2010 at 9:14 pm

    Flickering shadows on the wall
    A dim light from the street lamp
    Tapping sound as the raindrops fall
    Upon the soil, now oh so damp!

    super beautiful mixture and moisture of life…
    well done!

  4. Jingle said,

    September 13, 2010 at 9:15 pm

    Glad to see you in.
    Happy monday!

    Enjoy as many treats as you can,
    have fun!

    xxx

  5. Kavita said,

    September 13, 2010 at 9:45 pm

    oh my my !! This was delicious!!!
    I LOVED the construction of the poem, and visual effects!
    The 3rd stanza was WOW! It really stood out… even its rhyme scheme was different from the other stanzas… very cleverly done, Asmita!
    And with all the style and creativity, you have so very well kept the meaning unharmed and intact! That’s lovely! I adore the poem.. RIGHT FROM THE TITLE TO THE END!!!!
    Keep it up sweetie!
    And thank you so much for linking it with Poetry Potluck!! Very well played, keeping the theme in mind! Totally awestruck by this piece!!! Wow..

    • Alethea said,

      September 14, 2010 at 7:55 am

      thank you Kavita…so glad you enjoyed it!!! I got this idea while watching the video so of course I had to link it with the Potluck πŸ˜‰ You guys are doing a great job..thanks πŸ™‚

  6. buttercup600 said,

    September 13, 2010 at 10:58 pm

    I cannot agree more, the 3rd stanza was awesome, the way you structured this, so well done and well penned. Thanks so much for linking with Potluck. Much love xxx

    • Alethea said,

      September 14, 2010 at 7:57 am

      Thank you for organizing the potluck Amanda…I enjoyed it very much πŸ™‚

  7. September 14, 2010 at 12:48 am

    Amazing:) love your words my friend^^~Happy Poetry Potluck πŸ˜›

    • Alethea said,

      September 14, 2010 at 7:57 am

      Thank you….Happy Poetry Potluck to you too πŸ™‚

  8. mairmusic said,

    September 14, 2010 at 12:37 pm

    The alliteration is just lovely! And the storybook images transitioning to dreams… a very beautiful write!
    http://mairmusic.wordpress.com/

  9. Talon said,

    September 14, 2010 at 1:05 pm

    This was so soft and pretty…slipping into the dream place. Lovely!

  10. September 15, 2010 at 5:56 pm

    spell bound πŸ˜€

  11. Jamie Dedes said,

    September 21, 2010 at 4:09 am

    What a lovely poem, Amita. Does a good job of illustrating the slipping back and forth between consciousness and dream … I liked the third stanza as well, but the fourth is my favorite. So accurately describes the loss of some wisp of story, poem, idea, solution, understanding, memory … we try to grasp and it’s gone … nothing left behind to piece it together again. Love it. Thanks for a fine gift to us for Potluck … reall Yum! πŸ™‚

    • Alethea said,

      September 22, 2010 at 2:10 pm

      You’re welcome….thanks for liking it πŸ˜‰
      Your comment made me smile …thanks again Jamie πŸ™‚

  12. pot123 said,

    September 22, 2010 at 3:30 pm

    Beautiful.. and i especially like the third stanza. The first time i read it, i was like ‘You gotta be kidding me’.. it just went so well. And the whole concept of the poem itself is amazing. Brilliant!!

    • Alethea said,

      September 23, 2010 at 4:34 pm

      Yaaaay!!!! I’m loving the positive comments for the third stanza. Thank you so much for taking time to read and comment πŸ™‚

  13. Sina Saberi : The Blog said,

    September 29, 2010 at 11:04 am

    wow your poetry is so rich and beautiful πŸ™‚
    keep it up

  14. Jingle said,

    September 29, 2010 at 2:19 pm

    Oh,

    to accept the awards, right click on each award image, choose β€œsave the image as”, then save it to your computer desktop or a file, then do a new post in your blog, look at a black rectangle on upper left of your screen, click on insert image, browse to find the award file, choose upload, then insert image, that’s it….
    you can mention who give the awards to you…

    enjoy…
    Thanks for the lovely contribution.

    • Alethea said,

      September 30, 2010 at 3:17 am

      okay…thank you!!! Will do it in a short while and let you know πŸ™‚

  15. NotATameLion said,

    September 29, 2010 at 4:40 pm

    Haunting. I love how you transition from concrete reality through allusions to a fading of reality.

    • Alethea said,

      September 30, 2010 at 3:18 am

      glad you liked it..thanks for the comment πŸ™‚

  16. Angela said,

    September 29, 2010 at 8:00 pm

    Wow–this is a beautiful piece. Lovely and lyrical.

  17. October 1, 2010 at 9:52 am

    Amazing piece of writing my friend, keep it up, I look forward to reading more Kx
    http://kashaw.wordpress.com/

    http://katherine-shaw-poetry.com


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